Kuro Matching Contest - 3 Favorites - Spring 2014 • Millikin University

the black abyss
grows darker
oil spill

Alexandria Wilson

groaning machinery
this exhausting day
even the water fountain protests

Mckenzie Peck

time never gives
another chance
the second hand

Alec Campbell

silence for a moment
faint, constant beeping
wake up, daddy

Rebecca Coutcher

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groaning machinery
this exhausting day
even the water fountain protests

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silence for a moment
faint, constant beeping
wake up, daddy

 

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silence for a moment
faint, constant beeping
wake up, daddy

top quarter champion

 

TOP half Chamption

silence for a moment
faint, constant beeping
wake up, daddy

 

bottom quarter champion

distorted vision
my eyes tear filled
from her mother's comment

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distorted vision
my eyes tear filled
from her mother's comment

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weeping willow
waiting
for no one
anymore

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old furniture
the company I'll have tonight
unforgiven

Erin O'Brien

distorted vision
my eyes tear filled
from her mother's comment

Olivia Cuff

weeping willow
waiting
for no one
anymore

Mikayla Shaw

a rainbow over a pond
beauty at the moment
second storm coming

Rebecca Coutcher

 

TOP half champion

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silence for a moment
faint, constant beeping
wake up, daddy

 

 

CHAMPION

empty bottle
always before
the thirst is gone

 


 

empty bottle
always before
the thirst is gone

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BOTTOM half champion

the children laugh
too young to understand:
great aunt's funeral

Daniel Rausch

newborn baby
one step closer
to death

Mckenzie Peck

spendin' time//money
with//on Mary Jane & Molly—
we'll die someday

Valina Hoang

frost
eating the warmth
dying flowers

Brandi DeLeonardo

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the children laugh
too young to understand:
great aunt's funeral

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frost
eating the warmth
dying flowers

 

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the children laugh
too young to understand:
great aunt's funeral

top quarter champion

 

BOTTOM half champion

empty bottle
always before
the thirst is gone

 

bottom quarter champion

empty bottle
always before
the thirst is gone

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he wishes
he could do it over
broken mug

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empty bottle
always before
the thirst is gone

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snapped finger and
she didn't
even blink

Taylor Hagerdorn

he wishes
he could do it over
broken mug

Alec Campbell

raising a glass to
no one
warm moonlight

Jonathan Rieck

empty bottle
always before
the thirst is gone

Trista Smith

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Reader Responses:

the black abyss
grows darker
oil spill

Alexandria Wilson

groaning machinery
this exhausting day
even the water fountain protests

Mckenzie Peck

time never gives
another chance
the second hand

Alec Campbell

silence for a moment
faint, constant beeping
wake up, daddy

Rebecca Coutcher

I really liked this pairing because of how it has to do with machines and the man made. I thought it was really neat to see these haiku because traditionally haiku is very much about nature. Both of these haiku give an impression that is almost anti nature. I also just really like the second haiku without needing to be paired to the first one. Alec

I really like this haikus because they differ so much from most of the other haikus. Haikus are traditionally about nature but these are about machinery and bring the haiku into more of a modern setting. The first one is more using the idea of machinery as a metaphor, especially oil which is seen as a pollutant. The second one personifies a water fountain to show just how horrible a day is. Each haiku is using an aspect of machinery to show how rough or polluted a situation is. Trista

I liked this pairing because they both relate to time in some way. Time is something human made up, and it doesn't actually exist, but we all understand that we have a limited amount of it on earth. These are both good views of it, the physical clock in the first poem and the father who isn't getting up in the second poem. Brandi

This was my favorite pair from the matching contest because both of these just instill a powerful emotional reaction when read. The one reflects on how you can't get wasted time back while the other implies that time for someone has come to an end too soon. By pairing these together it allows the reader to see how. Mikayla

I really like this pair because I feel the desperation of time running out in each haiku. The first one is very general and can be applicable to any situation. The second one is more specific but still general enough. There is definitely more emotion in the second one, but they are still really good together. The first haiku is a good leeway into the second one. It describes the main idea and gives a little more insight into the issue at hand, which may or may not be the last breaths of someone's father. Rebecca

old furniture
the company I'll have tonight
unforgiven

Erin O'Brien

distorted vision
my eyes tear filled
from her mother's comment

Olivia Cuff

weeping willow
waiting
for no one
anymore

Mikayla Shaw

a rainbow over a pond
beauty at the moment
second storm coming

Rebecca Coutcher

       

distorted vision
my eyes tear filled
from her mother’s comment

silence for a moment
faint, constant beeping
wake up, daddy

distorted vision
my eyes tear filled
from her mother's comment

silence for a moment
faint, constant beeping
wake up, daddy

These two weren’t paired together originally, but I love them together so much. Separately, they are already heartbreaking. The first one, distorted vision, makes me think of two girls who love each other and are trying to be together despite homophobic and narrow-minded people around them. I can’t help but think that this is about a girl who is brought to tears by her girlfriend’s mother’s homophobic comment. This may not be how it was intended, but it’s how I interpret it. The second one, silence for a moment, nearly makes me cry. I can picture the scene - a child, or maybe a college kid, is sitting in the hospital, next to their father’s bed, and he is connected to who knows how many machines. There are tubes going in and out of his arms and facilitating his breathing, and one of the wires leads to the heart monitor that is beeping constantly, slowly, and faintly. Together though, they make a story that is just incredibly devastating. This girl is left crying after her girlfriend’s mother says something judgmental about “people like them” and she goes to her dad, who was always accepting of her and who she loved. But her dad isn't really there for her anymore. Sure he’s physically there, but he can’t give her a hug, comfort her and wipe away her tears. So she does the only thing she can, she takes his hand, still warm, thank god, and she cries. She tells him everything that happened, and she so desperately just wants him to wake up and talk her through this. Natalie

My favorite haiku pairing was during the second round of the Kuro matching contest between Rebecca's and my haiku. I love the fact that these weren't even paired together originally, but the mother/daddy connection works really well. I love how Rebecca's haiku is a person trying to get the attention of daddy, caring about what is going on with daddy. My haiku is then the opposite, with, in my mind, a best friend getting upset over her friend's mother's comment made toward her. She is trying to block out what the mother had just said, trying not to care about what was said. I like the contrast of the mother/daddy and not caring/caring. Olivia

At one point during class, we had to decide between these two. I like these two haiku because they are very dark and mysterious. The first one makes me think that some girl's dad is supposed to wake up at a certain time, but he is dead. I can feel the sadness and the confusion of the little girl as she tells her single father to wake up. I can see her shaking him and the na├»ve written all over on her face, as she has no clue how drastically her life is about to change. In the second one, I can see the girl from the previous haiku having to go live with her mother. Her dad was very caring and dedicated, unlike her mother. The mother is rude, unstable, and a drug addict. The girl, all grown up, runs up to her mom and says “mom I want to go to college!” Her mother, nonchalantly replies, “Your stupid self will never graduate high school, let alone college.” I can see the pain in the girl's eyes as the tears fill in the wells of her eyes. These two painful haiku are a perfect match to me. DJ

the children laugh
too young to understand:
great aunt's funeral

Daniel Rausch

newborn baby
one step closer
to death

Mckenzie Peck

spendin' time//money
with//on Mary Jane & Molly—
we'll die someday

Valina Hoang

frost
eating the warmth
dying flowers

Brandi DeLeonardo

I really liked this pair because they both emulated a sense of innocence that would soon be lost. These haiku created such an ephemeral sense of emotion, and I really liked how these two paired up. Children laughing at funerals and children being a step closer to death are almost juxtaposed and still so similar in sense. These haikus create a great pair because they provide pieces of real life as well. Overall, I think these haiku complement each other because they mention the childlike youth and purity before being exposed to the world outside. Jonathan

   

snapped finger and
she didn't
even blink

Taylor Hagerdorn

he wishes
he could do it over
broken mug

Alec Campbell

raising a glass to
no one
warm moonlight

Jonathan Rieck

empty bottle
always before
the thirst is gone

Trista Smith

   

I thought this was one of the best matched pairs out of both Kuro's & Miro's matching contests. It has a very sadistic and morbid mood to it. In the first one, I imagine a male or a female on their front porch and cheering to the night. It seems as if he or she is very lonely. Then, I read the second one. This character has an alcohol problem, and he/she could be drinking because he/she has nobody. But the character could also have nobody because of his/her disease. This matched pair is sad, but what I like about it is that it is realistic. This happens to more people than we know. I think it sucks that people have to turn to alcohol to take their pain away, but to them, it is their only escape. Valina

I really liked this pairing because both haikus easily flowed into each other and they helped tell one cohesive story. The two together showed that not only was the person drinking, but they were drinking because they were alone. Then, that same emptiness that they feel inside was reflected in their bottle. I really liked the imagery and the message in these two haiku paired together. I also think that together the warm moonlight made it a t least slightly optimistic. I hope that the character in this haiku finds solace in the stars and the warmth of the moon instead of at the bottom of another bottle. Allie

These two haiku caught my eye on the Kuro matching contest. They just seem like a story waiting to be had. I see a man who was stood up for a date. He decides to eat at the restaurant regardless. He orders some wine and tells the waiter to leave the bottle. In the outside seat that he chose, the moonlight washed over him. His meal came to him and as he ate, he drank his wine. Before he realized it, he drank the entire bottle of wine. Still he wanted more to drink, but did not want to pay for more wine. Instead he sat, holding the bottle in his hand, until the waiter came with the check. Danna