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Global Haiku • Millikin University • November 2014

so close:

fresh cut grass
bright colors
on the kites flying high









midnight walk
moonlight vision
brisk air




walk forever
to reach the waves
sand struggles




the hospital bed
watching the door
as the shadows pass by







check plurals & caps:

Chilly evenings
Dirt track racing
Checkered flag



hint of context:

seeing you tonight
loving you
always from afar


summer afternoon
cool fridge
lingering smell of vinegar













the stink coming from the back
doesn't bother us—
hockey win



plurals & de-list:

loud howls
open windows
bright moonlight

rearrange phrasing:

smell of bubble bath
shaving legs







hint of significance:

patches of snow
line the inside
of the windowsill



rearrange or de-list:

the last breakfast
cinnamon rolls
open heart surgery




April visit to Grandma's farm
back porch haven
hundreds of feathery peepers







three phrases:

he takes her hand
a silk white gown
the new dance starts



hint of where:

as if no time
has passed


© 2014, Randy Brooks • Millikin University
All rights returned to authors upon publication.